Edit my Sop regarding Data Analytics and Engineering Management without grammar mistakes and make sure it follows logical flow

Hey, I wrote 3 SOP's for my Graduate School Applications in Data Analytics & Engineering Management. I want you to proofread them and make sure there are no grammar errors. I also want you to please change the essay if you find it does not have the logical flow. You can remove content if you find its unrelated and also can add new content to make it sound logical. In addition, If you find the paragraph is good enough don't change it. Please Follow Instructions Carefully as mentioned below: (1) Data Analytics File : -In this, the first line must be removed or rephrased. Also, there seems to be a disconnect between the first paragraph and the rest of the essay(logical flow is Missing). - Also, make sure the last para is logical with rest of the essay. -I'm also having a doubt that should I include extracurricular activities or not Please help with that. if you find it not necessary please remove it. -Please make sure to have logical flow in essay - Please make the overall SOP awesome (2) MEM File: Follow same rules as mentioned above (3) SJSU File:- This is skimmed version of MEM file for different University. - There is a character limit for this SOP which is 3700.